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Diary Week 12

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Slow news day. Unfortunately, there is not much to report here.

I made the bullet points and excerpt for the Morning News in 90.  I talked with the online reporter, Samantha, about story ideas. She wanted to do a story on Florida legislation being decided on “growlers,” which are 64-ounce beer containers. It was a good idea, but she couldn’t get in contact with anyone during her early morning shift. I opened the email account for freelance submissions, and lo and behold, there was a submission on the same story. The writer had contacted a legislator and several Gainesville brewery owners. I thought it was a good story. I regretted having to contact the online reporter, though, to explain the situation. She was a good sport about getting scooped.

I then edited In the News. Here are some excerpts:

Dove World Outreach Center is selling its property in Gainesville for relocation to Tampa. Pastor Terry Jones and 15 members of the congregation will move to Tampa as well. Jones claims the center needs to downsize and the ideas of the congregation do not complement those of the city. The Independent Florida Alligator

Dove World Outreach Center is selling its property in Gainesville for relocation to Tampa. Pastor Terry Jones and 15 members of the congregation will move to Tampa as well. Jones said the center needs to downsize and the ideas of the congregation do not complement those of the city. The Independent Florida Alligator I changed this to “said” instead of “claims” because claims seems to imply suspicion or editorializing.

Adopting the referendum would allow the residents to vote for City Commissioners who oversee the utilities of the precinct, while not adopting the referendum would allow residents to continue to not be affected by City Commission decisions.

Adopting the referendum would allow the residents to vote for city commissioners who oversee the utilities of the precinct, while not adopting the referendum would allow residents to continue to not be affected by City Commission decisions. I thought city commissioners was a general title, therefore lowercased. 

Authorities monitor several brushfires as reports of fires rage west of Orlando in the Kissimmee area and east of Oviedo. Rain is forecasted this week, though thunderstorms and lightning could cause spark fires. Orlando Sentinel

Authorities monitor several brushfires in Central Florida, including fires raging west of Orlando in the Kissimmee area and east of Oviedo. Rain is forecasted this week, though thunderstorms and lightning could cause spark fires. Orlando Sentinel The first version makes it sound like the reports were raging west, as opposed to the fires. 

I also edited a story on the mayoral runoff election. All I found was a use of “their” in reference to an alliance. I changed the pronoun to its.

I also suggested a story to the Web producer, Dana. We have fallen into a practice of doing “little-known facts” pieces on random holidays. But for this April Fools’ Day, I wanted to do something more original. I asked Dana to use Storify to round up social media tidbits about the day. Some of them were pretty funny. I was impressed with the result.

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Written by charmainemiller

April 4, 2013 at 8:40 pm

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